Extra Scenes (11/2/2014)

Having finished the concept art and whilst waiting to show it to Ed, I decided to work on other possible scenes for the project as seen below...

Looking back at the previous two examples I wrote, I decided to use the captain as the audiences means of traveling through the stories events as in that way we wouldn't break up the scenes too much and would allow the audience to see the inside of the ship as if they are following the captain themselves.

I have also decided to continue to name each character after their occupation or in the muscle's case Golem. I will come up with proper names with the help of my partner since, although I love writing, naming characters has never been my strong point. 

Captain, Pilot and ship scene:

With his feet on the console, the pilot sits by the controls strumming lightly on his guitar before the captain walks into the cock pit, looking for something. Keeping his attention on the stars, the pilot says simply...

Pilot: "Captain..."

Captain: "Pilot, have you seen the mechanic anywhere?" 

Pilot: "No. Why?"

Captain: "Well, I was rather hoping he would be here telling you he has fixed everything. Or is that not the case?"

Pilot: "I haven't heard from him for hours, which is rare, and a relief."

The pilot takes a swig of the drink next to him as the captain rubs his weary head.

Captain: "Well on most days I would agree with you, but today I need to know his progress. How about the ship?"

Pilot: "What about the ship?"

Captain: "Does it know where he is?"

Pilot: "Why not ask it yourself? There is an on board communications channel throughout the ship after all." 

Captain: "I tried that, but after barely getting past those raiders in the An-ash quadrant I think the ship blames me for its injuries and won't answer me."  

Pilot: "I see..."

Captain: "I keep telling the ship that it wasn't my fault! But you know the ship, once it gets anxious, its almost impossible to change its mind."

Pilot: "I'll see what I can do. Ship?"

Lights shine around the controls as a nervous voice is heard.

Ship: "Y-yes pilot?"

Pilot: "The captain would like to know where the mechanic is. Could you tell him for me?"

Pause.

Capatain: "Well?"

Pilot: "Give it some time... "

Ship: "T-there in the south wing, corridor B. Now please leave us, I was rather enjoying the pilot's guitar piece."

Pilot: "Anything else captain?"

Captain: "No, not now. Though tell the ship that I am sorry and want a word with it later..."

The captain leaves and the pilot continues to play his guitar after taken another swig of his drink.

 

Captain and Dock Worker scene:

The ships doors lower to reveal a dock. At the foot of the door rests a disapproving dock worker.

Dock Worker: "I thought I told you never to come here again!"

Captain: "It's nice to see you too... whats the fee?"

Dock Worker: "Fee!? I should take your whole ship for the trouble you caused last time!"

Captain "I told you didn't I? I didn't know the cargo was live! Had I done so, I would have never let you inspect its contents and release that Tan-gol Behemoth."

Dock Worker: "We're still repairing that dock you trashed! What makes you think I'll let you onto this one!?"

Captain "Because of my charming personalty?"

Dock Worker: "BAH!"

Looking back at his crew the captain notices that they are waiting for him to give the A-ok. Realising however the situation the captain reluctantly pulls out a large pouch. 

Captain "Fine, how about you treat yourself and let us go about our business? Off the record? Ok?"

The captain places the pouch in the dock worker's hand. The latter inspects the crystal contents with eager eyes.

Dock Worker: "Hmm... nice doing 'business' with you captain. Now, deliver your goods, fuel up and get out of my sight! Also, don't cause any trouble this time, OK!?"

Captain "Hey, we don't go looking for trouble..."

Dock Worker: "Yea, yea..."

The dock worker turns to leave as the captain sighs with relief, indicating for his crew to move out.

Captain: "Trouble just seems to find us..."

Team Briefing: 

The captain stands alone by a table in the middle of the conference room. Looking around he sighs and calls out.

Captain: "Ok! Everyone down here! Team meeting!"

A couple of seconds pass before the crew start to spill into the room one by one. 

Pilot: "What's this all about?"

Mechanic: "I have no bloody clue..."

Once everyone has arrived the captain claps his hands together, ready to start.

Captain: "Right! I have been hearing word that people have been wondering why we changed course."

Pilot: "That did cross my mind..."

Mechanic: "And haven't been paid!"

Pilot: "That as well..."

Captain: "Ok, ok, I know I haven't paid you in quite a while..."

Mechanic: "HA! You can say that again!"

Captain: "WELL, this is the answer!"

The captain pulls out a tatty piece of paper and holds it in the air.

Golem "A piece of paper?"

Captain: "Close! A piece of paper which also happens to be a treasure map!"

Groans can be heard from everyone.

Mechanic: "You have got to be BLOODY kidding me! Your telling me that we have been floating around in space on what little fuel we have left... over the promise of a sodding handkerchief?"

Pilot: "I agree with the mechanic for once, why take the risk? This isn't like you captain."

Captain: "Because I for one know this map is genuine!"

Rolling the paper out on the table, he points to the symbols and diagrams that cover it.

Captain: "Golem!"

Golem: "Yes captain?"

Captain: "Your people know the legend of the Za-goth don't they? Please, tell the crew what you know..."

All eyes fall on the golem as it clears its throat before speaking.

Golem: "Very well captain..."

Screen fades to telling the golem's story through images of some sort.

Golem: "Millions of years ago there lived an ancient and powerful race known as the Za-goth, who sought enlightenment and peace. This race traveled to thousands of worlds in order to educate and provide them with the means of bettering themselves."

Pilot: "So what happened to them?"

Golem: "They did this for a thousand years until one day they disappeared from the universe. Taking everything they had back to their home world, they sealed themselves behind an impenetrable dome that surrounded their planet. It is said that behind this dome exists treasure and technology beyond comprehension. Though the existence of the planet is unknown, it is said that those that prove themselves will find such a planet and be rewarded..."

Screen fades back to the conference room. 

Captain: "And this is the map that will lead us to that planet! I know it is! I had people look into it. It's a star chart that clearly resembles this very solar system! Its age matches the date of Za-goth's existence and the planets are aligned where they would have been!  If we can just figure it out and 'prove ourselves' then we would be the richest mercenaries alive!"

Pilot: "Figure it out?"

Captain: "Well, err, some of it isn't legible. But that's why we are going to find someone who can make sense of it!"

Mechanic: "Well, that's was a nice bed time story and all... but you said that this so called dome around the planet was impenetrable! Even if such a place exists, then why should we waste time trying to break into something we can't!"

Golem: "There are keys that would grant us access."

Captain: "One of which I have!"

The captain pulls out an ancient gold and red rod about the size of his hand.

(To be continued...)